Reported for blatant self-promotion, enjoy your perma ban.
(But seriously, awesome job! That'll be next on my to-read list!)
"Harry's All-Night Hamburgers" is also a pretty good read. I could definitely see it as either an animated film or a PG live action family film (if one scene gets removed or replaced).
Thanks! I wrote it over the course of about 7 years and finished it on a self-imposed goal at the end of 2014. I go back and re-read certain scenes and genuinely crack up, forgetting that I wrote them in the first place, so I guess that's a good sign. lol
I luckily have a few solid industry contacts that will potentially get it read quicker than otherwise, but there's no making up for garbage, so I am trying to get the script as tight as possible. It's a bit longish right now for what amounts to a straight comedy.