Andre, if you're reading this, try adding:
- The names of the people you harmed so that we at least know that you're aware of the subject matter
- Specific descriptions of what you did wrong
- Explanations of how what you did was harmful
- Goals that you have set with regards to making right on this
- Goals that you have set with regards to preventing this from continuing in the future
- Action plans with regards to making right on this
- Action plans with regards to preventing this from happening in the future
- Descriptions of the discussions you've since had with the people you've caused harm, including what you've learned and what you're going to do as a result
- Descriptions of the actions you've already taken as a result of this
Because a lot of this is about you and how you feel, but you and how you feel aren't really the important things in this scenario.
Granted, I don't know if you get a second shot at this, but the next time you screw up, I guess.